This is fun. So looks like it's going to be a Spiderverse type plot. I think you could perhaps linger in scenes a bit more, feels a little too fast pace wise. And a clearer way to show the perspective shift to the evil Madeleine would be nice. Also I've decided to call her Wadeleine now. Self aware evil characters are fun, looking forward to more of her.
I actually had a longer scene with Evil Madeleine when I originally wrote this for my old Wordpress blog, but I thought it fit in better cut down a bit. I knew I should've listened to my inner writing voice. :)
This is fun. So looks like it's going to be a Spiderverse type plot. I think you could perhaps linger in scenes a bit more, feels a little too fast pace wise. And a clearer way to show the perspective shift to the evil Madeleine would be nice. Also I've decided to call her Wadeleine now. Self aware evil characters are fun, looking forward to more of her.
I actually had a longer scene with Evil Madeleine when I originally wrote this for my old Wordpress blog, but I thought it fit in better cut down a bit. I knew I should've listened to my inner writing voice. :)