You know Malevolent Med-Student has a point about titles and stuff. Still laughed at his suffering, and other parts of the story (not Mr. Bean!). Feel like the asides were a little too long and distracting though.
Fair point: I tend to run a bit in my writing sometimes, especially on the super stories where I'm really in the mood to write. I'll work on tightening the asides. Thanks!
You know Malevolent Med-Student has a point about titles and stuff. Still laughed at his suffering, and other parts of the story (not Mr. Bean!). Feel like the asides were a little too long and distracting though.
Fair point: I tend to run a bit in my writing sometimes, especially on the super stories where I'm really in the mood to write. I'll work on tightening the asides. Thanks!